Please critque my writing for my novel? Thankyou.?
From the middle of chapter 1. worthy of publishing? RockMaster High School hadnt changed a bit. Maneuvering through the overcrowded halls was just as difficult as ever the lunch ladies chicken casserole still tasted like rubber and Chloes three year crush on Andy Bolton still burned with the fiery intensity of several thousand suns. I exaggerate the chicken casserole had definitely improved. Shoot. Chloe murmured staring at the frenzied caf engulfing her. Lunch is a sociological examination of high school. Where you sit who you sit with who you are. Chloe had once thought there was nothing more frightening then a R rated blood curdling horror film. Now as a vulnerable freshman at RockMaster High School she realized there was nothing more horrifying than the cafeteria. Chloe was an invisible soul standing among living creatures who felt and gossiped who were normal. Chloe felt potential sobs prick her eyes as she fished through her quilted tote for her phone. Leaving the cafeteria Chloe hit Giselles cell phone number on her autodial. RockMaster High School was Giselles acclaimed kingdom she could easily snag Chloe a table or even company. What are the grammatical errors? This isnt the first draft...i thought I caught everything/
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